tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3035041836736573810.post298824976725091824..comments2023-05-24T15:30:20.127+01:00Comments on Julia Mason: Robert Wienes Des Cabinet des Dr.Caligori (1920) - Film ReviewJulia Masonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08064053711912076886noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3035041836736573810.post-76343985150406233022014-09-24T18:23:49.576+01:002014-09-24T18:23:49.576+01:00Thank you for the great advice, I have changed the...Thank you for the great advice, I have changed the templates default text font to something a little more readable. If you want me to change it any further let me know. <br /><br />I literally wrote the film reviews one after the other so I will apply your advice from both reviews to the next one I write and when given time go back over these two and apply them to that as well. <br /><br />Thanks<br />JuliaJulia Masonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08064053711912076886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3035041836736573810.post-27546182230083805272014-09-24T07:31:23.227+01:002014-09-24T07:31:23.227+01:00Hi Julia - well done on getting your first review ...Hi Julia - well done on getting your first review out there! :)<br /><br />Just a couple of points - please could you change your font to something that is a bit easier on the aging eye (ie mine and Phil's!) Stick with something like Ariel - it also looks a lot more professional. <br /><br />You have put a lot of thought into this review, and my main point today would be really just concerning the tone. Try and get into the habit of not using the 1st person in your writing; if you use the 3rd person, it will sound a lot more academic and less chatty. So, for example, 'This reminds me a little of King Kong, the moment when the outcast monster of the film takes the fair maiden hostage,' could be written as 'This could remind the audience of King Kong, the moment when the outcast monster of the film takes the fair maiden hostage.' Have a look at the guide that Phil has posted on the group blog, for hints and tips on using the 3rd person. <br /><br />The only other thing really to say at the moment is, to make sure that you reference your quote after each one, with the surname and the date, so (Bradshaw, 2014) for example. You need to do this even if you have mentioned the full name of the author in the introduction to the quote.<br /><br />Keep it up! :)Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13332181835614441447noreply@blogger.com